In each of the following sentences, sentence construction obscures the complementary relationship between parallel phrases. Discussion following each example explains the problem, and revisions illustrate solutions.
1. Follow this step with user support and usage monitoring to ensure a smooth transition and optimal user experience during and post-implementation.
The phrase “during and post-implementation” is treated as if it is an instance of suspensive hyphenation, but the sentence is incomplete with a noun after during: “Follow this step with user support and usage monitoring to ensure a smooth transition and an optimal user experience during implementation and postimplementation.” However, the prefixed word postimplementation is correct but unwieldy, so simply withhold the repetition and replace the prefix with a free-standing conjunction: “Follow this step with user support and usage monitoring to ensure a smooth transition and an optimal user experience during and after implementation.”
2. There seems to be an idea that blaming the other side for failure is as good, if not better, than getting something done in a bipartisan way.
If a parenthetical phrase has been interjected into a sentence, in its absence, the base sentence must be syntactically valid. Here, the result of a test deletion of “if not better” is “There seems to be an idea that blaming the other side for failure is as good than getting something done in a bipartisan way.” Obviously, something is wrong—a repetition of as is necessary, and than belongs in the parenthesis: “There seems to be an idea that blaming the other side for failure is as good as, if not better than, getting something done in a bipartisan way.”
3. This regulation helps guarantee the financial services industry upholds its obligation to protect consumers and ensure that its systems are sufficiently constructed to prevent cyberattacks to the fullest extent possible.
The conjunction that is sometimes unnecessary (“Do you think it’s required in this sentence?”), but if it employed in a given phrase, it should be included in a complementary phrase in the same sentence, as here: “This regulation helps guarantee that the financial services industry upholds its obligation to protect consumers and ensure that its systems are sufficiently constructed to prevent cyberattacks to the fullest extent possible.” (Without that in place after guarantee, the reader is initially misled into thinking that the regulation guarantees the industry itself rather than something about the industry.)
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